http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/08/better-to-light-a-candle/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=better-to-light-a-candle Publishing Creative and Contemporary Writing Wed, 08 Feb 2012 03:07:37 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/08/better-to-light-a-candle/comment-page-1/#comment-179 Quasimofo Fri, 15 Jun 2007 21:32:50 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/08/better-to-light-a-candle/#comment-179 Maybe I'm being assuming, but sounds like someone had a hefty crush on their English teacher ? Well, I did too! There's something about them that we poet's just find amazingly intoxicating--and it's not just the One-Act Plays... They are, perhaps, one of the earliest and profound influences on us as writers...we are their bastard sons! ...or daughters! The description of J Dickert's 'mentor' is elaborate enough for me to see her in my mind...a word is 1/1000th of a picture after all. I particularly noticed some key words in the 1st 3-4 lines: classy, framed, art, sculpture. Describing from a central metaphor takes a lot of reflection and talent...good job. I also liked: "The walk of authority pushed a wind through her auburn hair that was resting shoulder length, held into place by leather armed Armani sunglasses." God I have a thing for women in authority...I just want to bow down and be their slave...worship their beauty, and retrieve high-pulp orange juice for them in chilled glasses... Fine ending also...remembrance is essential to reminding us who we are. Maybe I’m being assuming, but sounds like someone had a hefty crush on their English teacher ? Well, I did too! There’s something about them that we poet’s just find amazingly intoxicating–and it’s not just the One-Act Plays… They are, perhaps, one of the earliest and profound influences on us as writers…we are their bastard sons! …or daughters! The description of J Dickert’s ‘mentor’ is elaborate enough for me to see her in my mind…a word is 1/1000th of a picture after all. I particularly noticed some key words in the 1st 3-4 lines: classy, framed, art, sculpture. Describing from a central metaphor takes a lot of reflection and talent…good job. I also liked: “The walk of authority pushed a wind through her auburn hair that was resting shoulder length, held into place by leather armed Armani sunglasses.” God I have a thing for women in authority…I just want to bow down and be their slave…worship their beauty, and retrieve high-pulp orange juice for them in chilled glasses… Fine ending also…remembrance is essential to reminding us who we are.

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