Comments on: trompe l’oeil http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=the-submerged-and-ancient-cough Publishing Creative and Contemporary Writing Wed, 08 Feb 2012 03:07:37 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Halifax http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/comment-page-1/#comment-205 Halifax Mon, 25 Jun 2007 03:14:33 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/#comment-205 Yes, it hurt deeply. Yes, it hurt deeply.

]]> By: savagewave http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/comment-page-1/#comment-204 savagewave Mon, 25 Jun 2007 00:52:36 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/#comment-204 did it hurt when she slipped on her dress? . :-) did it hurt when she slipped on her dress?

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:-)

]]> By: Quasimofo http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/comment-page-1/#comment-203 Quasimofo Sun, 24 Jun 2007 16:30:18 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/#comment-203 I think Halifax is right..the name of that album is Doolittle. I've heard a remake version of "Wave of Mutilation" on the 'Pump up the Volume' soundtrack (not bad..Leonard Cohen, I think). I also like Pixie's Surfer Rosa album which has "Where is my mind?"..something i relate to everyday. Real name? ..Mike Snyder. Let me know who this other writer is so i can chop off their head...THERE CAN BE ONLY ONE! ..just kiddin'. Trompe L'oeil...Trick of the eye...thanks. no rewrites necessary. I think Halifax is right..the name of that album is Doolittle. I’ve heard a remake version of “Wave of Mutilation” on the ‘Pump up the Volume’ soundtrack (not bad..Leonard Cohen, I think). I also like Pixie’s Surfer Rosa album which has “Where is my mind?”..something i relate to everyday.

Real name? ..Mike Snyder.
Let me know who this other writer is so i can chop off their head…THERE CAN BE ONLY ONE! ..just kiddin’.
Trompe L’oeil…Trick of the eye…thanks. no rewrites necessary.

]]> By: Halifax http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/comment-page-1/#comment-201 Halifax Sun, 24 Jun 2007 03:11:22 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/#comment-201 I like "ascending grass", great perspective phrase. Interesting visuals. Doolittle. I like “ascending grass”, great perspective phrase. Interesting visuals.

Doolittle.

]]> By: misener http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/comment-page-1/#comment-200 misener Sun, 24 Jun 2007 00:04:36 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/#comment-200 hey Quasimofo- what be your name? I'm just curious. You write like somebody I know. . . "trompe l'oeil" means "trick of the eye" and refers to a style of painting that fools the viewer into seeing three dimensions where there are only two. . . the pixies were a favorite of mine in high school, especially the immortal. . . shit, what was the name of the album with "wave of mutilation" on it? There's no Whooshay in here. . . this was just a dream I had. This piece, however poorly written, was a first draft as I lay in bed minutes after waking up. No rewrites, though it probably needs one. . . Thanks for the comment. hey Quasimofo- what be your name? I’m just curious. You write like somebody I know. . .

“trompe l’oeil” means “trick of the eye” and refers to a style of painting that fools the viewer into seeing three dimensions where there are only two. . . the pixies were a favorite of mine in high school, especially the immortal. . . shit, what was the name of the album with “wave of mutilation” on it?

There’s no Whooshay in here. . . this was just a dream I had. This piece, however poorly written, was a first draft as I lay in bed minutes after waking up. No rewrites, though it probably needs one. . .

Thanks for the comment.

]]> By: Quasimofo http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/comment-page-1/#comment-198 Quasimofo Sat, 23 Jun 2007 21:26:21 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2007/06/22/the-submerged-and-ancient-cough/#comment-198 "Dropped into France with a cosmic vacuous THUD..." like the poem itself onto the reader's dreamscape which says to me: 'we most often prefer what we know over the unfamiliar, even if it's not as fru-fru-pretty.' Once again Misener proves a master of adjectives. I feel the baby "in hand" in the 1st paragraph will grow up to be the Whooshay (any truth to that?). The whole piece, I thought, had vivid/imaginative scenery. I particularly liked that part: "A statue of a rearing horse behind a fuzzy pink park bench materializes again in front of the ascending grass." (I've heard about those kinda things popping up in San Francisco). Since my French is so awful (I took Spanish and German in school), I wasn't able to tie in the meaning of the title 'trompe l'oelil' to the rest of the poem...but it reminded me of my Trompe le'monde Pixies album--I'm gonna have to find that sucker now and dust it off for 'all the record shops [that] are empty or clutching at straws'. One more thing that i noticed...the two sentence fragments at the beginning...that's a technique some might be 'anal' about using, or frown upon, but i think it's constructive to getting those cobwebbed cogs of the readers' minds turning (changing it up a little!) Thanks for sharing this piece, Misener, I'd love to get a hold of your next chapbook! “Dropped into France with a cosmic vacuous THUD…” like the poem itself onto the reader’s dreamscape which says to me: ‘we most often prefer what we know over the unfamiliar, even if it’s not as fru-fru-pretty.’ Once again Misener proves a master of adjectives. I feel the baby “in hand” in the 1st paragraph will grow up to be the Whooshay (any truth to that?). The whole piece, I thought, had vivid/imaginative scenery. I particularly liked that part: “A statue of a rearing horse behind a fuzzy pink park bench materializes again in front of the ascending grass.” (I’ve heard about those kinda things popping up in San Francisco). Since my French is so awful (I took Spanish and German in school), I wasn’t able to tie in the meaning of the title ‘trompe l’oelil’ to the rest of the poem…but it reminded me of my Trompe le’monde Pixies album–I’m gonna have to find that sucker now and dust it off for ‘all the record shops [that] are empty or clutching at straws’. One more thing that i noticed…the two sentence fragments at the beginning…that’s a technique some might be ‘anal’ about using, or frown upon, but i think it’s constructive to getting those cobwebbed cogs of the readers’ minds turning (changing it up a little!) Thanks for sharing this piece, Misener, I’d love to get a hold of your next chapbook!

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