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Falling Down

Submitted by on January 19, 2009 – 11:41 amOne Comment


Falling Down
by jim benz

pull yourself together, breathe

got twisted in a lung fit, coughing
spit up bone-songs, all stripped down
all feedback snarl and knuckle skin
choking on a dream nozzle shiver, spit-grin juice

grated, lesion-mated spastic anti-fortune juice
rasped a halo-skin against
a rusty sieve juice
knees, minor blood shot keys and snake-eyes

drumbeat fingers, amplified, bone-dead
slung a jaw
a crack-skull jaw, moon floor shake
under people’s skin, dancing

shadow grit and ruin-eyes
blood soot
longing for a midnight blur, caustic
smelly liquor-rat brick alley-eyes

wore a grin, a weird stink-tooth craggy
crumble grin, wasted goat-word bleating shit-
stain grin, swilling gin
slurred a head-butt word, convulsive, swaggering

resinous word
and falling grin, yellow curdled hell
guffaw-scat grin, sticky brown cursing
flail juice as you stumble grin

falling on your ass-grin
sprawling on the broken bottle stickum tile
slop puddle tilt
shoe-slurp grin, breathe

pull yourself together

One Comment »

  • Quasimofo says:

    Cacophonous and jolting; agonizing and powerful. This is one helluva pep-talk to oneself in some down-and-out industrial setting by a mirror. Strong description, off-beat cadence, surgical repetition…all astound my senses. Whoa! Nice piece, man. i feel. Irregular word splices/combos are just highly out-of-ordinary striking me deep…it’s the farthest thing from cliche’. Which is good to experience. thx.

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