Comments for Haggard & Halloo Publications http://www.haggardandhalloo.com Publishing Creative and Contemporary Writing Fri, 12 Mar 2010 15:14:08 -0800 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 Comment on Self Portrait One Year From Now by fogman http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/11/self-portrait-one-year-from-now/comment-page-1/#comment-2242 fogman Fri, 12 Mar 2010 15:14:08 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6331#comment-2242 There seems to be a strong backstory behind this poem, one that keeps me coming back and looking deeper into its inferences. The middle stanza is the most puzzling, but gets clearer as the lines develop into a small portrait of infidelity and abandonment. Or at least I presume. So, it seems to be looking to an idealic (for the speaker) near future of recovery from the abandonment. There's a little bit of extended word associations, with the snakes and the everglades, that I like, and the ambiguities keep drawing me back in. This is a poem that grows on me. I didn't care for it so much at first, but I keep coming back. There seems to be a strong backstory behind this poem, one that keeps me coming back and looking deeper into its inferences. The middle stanza is the most puzzling, but gets clearer as the lines develop into a small portrait of infidelity and abandonment. Or at least I presume. So, it seems to be looking to an idealic (for the speaker) near future of recovery from the abandonment. There’s a little bit of extended word associations, with the snakes and the everglades, that I like, and the ambiguities keep drawing me back in. This is a poem that grows on me. I didn’t care for it so much at first, but I keep coming back.

]]> Comment on Self Portrait One Year From Now by fogman http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/11/self-portrait-one-year-from-now/comment-page-1/#comment-2241 fogman Fri, 12 Mar 2010 00:14:55 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6331#comment-2241 self-protrait thirty years from now: dirt, decay, more worms than I can shake a stick at. self-protrait thirty years from now: dirt, decay, more worms than I can shake a stick at.

]]> Comment on spill by misener http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/10/spill/comment-page-1/#comment-2240 misener Thu, 11 Mar 2010 12:57:47 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6327#comment-2240 This takes a couple of reads. The flow can be stuttering at times, a bit confusing. Yet. . . It is a dream, I suppose. That being said, I loved it. Strong and refreshing imagery and some genuinely funny moments, like: "I’ve told you already about the eye patch and permanent palm prints on my pasty forehead, that came from playing Patty Cake and Rock-Paper-Scissors with a paranoid schizophrenic Three Stooges fan in Washington Park" distracting comma aside, images like this make for an interesting piece. Could use a rewrite to make it truly memorable. Thanks for the entertaining read. This takes a couple of reads. The flow can be stuttering at times, a bit confusing. Yet. . . It is a dream, I suppose.

That being said, I loved it. Strong and refreshing imagery and some genuinely funny moments, like:

“I’ve told you already
about the eye patch and permanent
palm prints on my pasty forehead, that came from playing
Patty Cake and Rock-Paper-Scissors with a paranoid
schizophrenic Three Stooges fan in Washington Park”

distracting comma aside, images like this make for an interesting piece. Could use a rewrite to make it truly memorable.

Thanks for the entertaining read.

]]> Comment on i won’t by pelydon http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/09/i-wont/comment-page-1/#comment-2239 pelydon Tue, 09 Mar 2010 22:14:39 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6323#comment-2239 The Morse code bit is excellent. The Morse code bit is excellent.

]]> Comment on The Art of Listening by cerebella http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/08/the-art-of-listening/comment-page-1/#comment-2238 cerebella Tue, 09 Mar 2010 19:45:26 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6246#comment-2238 you're from faerytale land! i'm a native! you’re from faerytale land! i’m a native!

]]> Comment on The Art of Listening by misener http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/08/the-art-of-listening/comment-page-1/#comment-2237 misener Tue, 09 Mar 2010 19:10:30 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6246#comment-2237 Close. A peninsula. Shaped like a mitten. Close. A peninsula. Shaped like a mitten.

]]> Comment on The Art of Listening by cerebella http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/08/the-art-of-listening/comment-page-1/#comment-2236 cerebella Tue, 09 Mar 2010 18:42:53 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6246#comment-2236 calliope would be another great muse to have. cool poem. i would like sensible fruit with it over fries. even the blog is kiwi coloured. are you from a tiny island? calliope would be another great muse to have. cool poem. i would like sensible fruit with it over fries.

even the blog is kiwi coloured. are you from a tiny island?

]]> Comment on The Art of Listening by misener http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/08/the-art-of-listening/comment-page-1/#comment-2235 misener Tue, 09 Mar 2010 14:50:45 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6246#comment-2235 Cerebella--- Here's a link to another discarded kiwi: http://calliopenerve.blogspot.com/2009/02/little-god-in-yellow-hat.html Cerebella— Here’s a link to another discarded kiwi:

http://calliopenerve.blogspot.com/2009/02/little-god-in-yellow-hat.html

]]> Comment on The Art of Listening by cerebella http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/08/the-art-of-listening/comment-page-1/#comment-2234 cerebella Tue, 09 Mar 2010 02:37:55 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6246#comment-2234 wow. really cool i pointed to bring it up, then. i have my fair share of standbys, myself. kiwis are deliciously sloppy. wow. really cool i pointed to bring it up, then. i have my fair share of standbys, myself. kiwis are deliciously sloppy.

]]> Comment on The Art of Listening by misener http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/2010/03/08/the-art-of-listening/comment-page-1/#comment-2233 misener Mon, 08 Mar 2010 20:52:56 +0000 http://www.haggardandhalloo.com/?p=6246#comment-2233 Thanks. "Discarded kiwi" has made itself visible in about four of my poems. I'm not sure why. I usually eat them rather than throw them out. Thanks. “Discarded kiwi” has made itself visible in about four of my poems. I’m not sure why. I usually eat them rather than throw them out.

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