saying it again
Saying It Again
by john bennett
When he
said that a
large percentage
of the words
on the
potential terrorist
list that
led to his
detention
could be
found in the
Bible
the man
standing
over him
began
striking him
across the face
with a
length of
hard rubber
repeating
over &
over again
“What?
What did you say?
What did you just say?”
This strikes me more of a nice first sentence to a short story than it does a poem. I liked it, but as a poem it reads choppy. Try just reading it w/o lines and it works. I’d be drawn into the story for sure.
I read this through and thought it was very good. I didn’t heed the form at all because I knew it wasn’t going to do it for me. You could have just written it out in a sentence and they likely would have posted it, because it’s very timely and clever. It’s like a very dark Jack Handy quote.
I laughed my ass off at the way it ends. No quibbles here. The part in quotations is perfect.
owww! that smarts.