Maria's of the Sea

Maria’s of the Sea
by halifax
Mark 6:47
that day out past the reef
His friends all went ahead
dragging fishnets behind
She’s usually a sober girl
but this day she is tossed
furiously deep in her cup
flashing her tits at them
to provoke some jealousy
but none would cross him
Denied even a hint of concern
she started to rock the boat
squalling like a spoiled baby
He walked out on her show
unimpressed footprints left
Maria snaps spite at his bud
sends Peter tumbling below deck
He’s so cool though, helps him up
and goes right back to fishing.

0 thoughts on “Maria's of the Sea

  1. Hmm… it’s hard to say when the word before it is “like”. I always try to stay away from similes. Many believe similes don’t belong in poetry, but you find them everywhere in poetry. So who knows.
    “squalling like the ghost of a seagull”?

  2. an obvious temptress threat
    oh piffle…
    maybe. I’d rather take more time on it. I hope someone gets the pieces I had in place and appreciates it. Consider it still in progress.

    1. that day out past the reef
      His friends all went ahead
      dragging fishnets behind
      She’s usually a sober girl
      but this day she is tossed
      furiously deep in her cup
      flashing her tits at them
      to provoke some jealousy
      but none would cross him
      Denied even a hint of concern
      she started to rock the boat
      like a woman possessed
      He walked out on her show
      unimpressed footprints left
      Maria snaps spite at his bud
      sends Peter tumbling below deck
      He’s so cool though, helps him up
      and goes right back to fishing.

  3. “squalling like a tarred gull” was what I was thinking, ha, but you’re being too hard on yourself anyway, Halifax. the visuals struck me distinctly. It’s good.

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