Sex Dreams
by John Bennett
The best
thing about
a sex
dream
is you
wake up
alone.
0 thoughts on “Sex Dreams”
Yep. You don’t have to sustain a relationship.
Comments about the line breaks: “best/thing about” emphasizes both “best” and “thing,” drawing attention to sex as a “thing” in itself; “about” creating interest in what comes next: “a sex,” which, coupled with an article, diminishes into something a-sexual; hitting hard then on “dream,” on a line by itself, thereby taking more away from “sex;” “you” then standing out in the next line, as something apart resolving into the everyday “wake up,” which ends with “alone” on a line by itself, putting the ultimate emphasis on the poem’s point. Good craft.
Yep. You don’t have to sustain a relationship.
Comments about the line breaks: “best/thing about” emphasizes both “best” and “thing,” drawing attention to sex as a “thing” in itself; “about” creating interest in what comes next: “a sex,” which, coupled with an article, diminishes into something a-sexual; hitting hard then on “dream,” on a line by itself, thereby taking more away from “sex;” “you” then standing out in the next line, as something apart resolving into the everyday “wake up,” which ends with “alone” on a line by itself, putting the ultimate emphasis on the poem’s point. Good craft.